Have you ever felt?

Question

Love Drug Damned - monotetra

Tell me why I am full of shame,

for I did everything the same;

I let none other take the blame.

...don't play this game, don't play this game.

The outcome of our broken trust

is that I've earned your full disgust,

and now I struggle to adjust.

...I can't sate lust, I can't sate lust.

Shaky, I need a fix from you

my love is great, my needs are few,

I'll take the pain you put me through.

...what else to do, what else to do?

Answer 1

Interesting form and what a poem!

Answer 2

Very nicely done, and the end rhyming stanzas read smoothly and eloquently.

Answer 3

I loved it your an amazing poet and you really seem to know what your doing.

The poem ment something to me and it was very deep.

Im glad i decided to read it

Thank You

Answer 4

It's a new style for me, thank you for the name/link. Always the teacher... *smile

Here is my poetic response to your question ...

No longer do I feel the same,

you broke the rules, you played the game,

your head now hangs, in utter shame.

...forget my name, forget my name.

Much love always,

Temari

Answer 5

Personal experience or plain poetic drama, either way you shine your light of dark down on me again...

Answer 6

Looks like you mastered it to me, my dear, and very well, too!

Answer 7

i'll give it a whirl too....

tell you why you're full of shame?

pleased to tell you he's to blame!

don't you dare roast on this backfire flame.

...look in his eye, look in his eye..

the outcome of broken crust

was formed by his hollow dust

and love filled hearts i know never rust.

...you say hey!, you say hey!...

Shakey, it felt sometimes before?

its just Love wanting more.

you take this emptiness and fill it back up.

...use your golden cup, use your golden cup...

oh well i tried!! (way bad meter)

ty Eva for the new 'Formula'!

Answer 8

WOW thats awesome im a poem writer too!:)

you should write more! :]

Answer 9

Ha i was going to say it sounds like your talking about a drug and then I read the title...It goes perfectly with the song I'm listening to

"Love me cancerously, like a salt-sore soaked in the sea."High maintenance" means your a gluttonous queen,

narcissistic and mean.

Kill me romantically, fill my soul with vomit

then ask me for a piece of gum.

Bitter and dumb, you're my sugarplum

you're awful, I love you...She moves through moonbeams slowly She knows just how to hold me

and when her edges soften, her body is my coffin.

I know she drains me slowly

She wears me down to bones in bed...

must be the sign on my head, it says,

"Oh love me dead!" Love me dead"

Okay so maybe not perfectly but still..I liked it a lot and my background music just made the  feeling  even more bitter

Answer 10

yes. sometimes. i guess.