Here is a free verse poem?

Question

here i am

lying awake

no one knows how i feel

my face full of happiness

my eyes full tears

i sit here with broken memories

and i watch the ppl go on

almost a stranger to my family

with the secrets i keep so dear

every day i remember

every day i speak but no one is there to listen

i lay there faking a smile

here i am in silence in pain

this is just the begging and if u have answered my ast question u would think my friend wrote it i did and remember i am only 13 so be honest but kind

Answer 1

That type of poem is extremely overdone and stereotypical.

First, use a proper poem form. Something with verse and meter. Second, use things like grammar, punctuation, and for goodness' sake, actually spell out words. Third, try to use actual poetry techniques, like imagery.

And take some literature classes, too. That usually helps.

Answer 2

fear of loss.  my soul's deranged.  honestly.  just give me a touch.  my soul is so broken i've lost too much.  of myself of my family my friends and pet's too.  we've spoken sense then but nothing will do.  i have a point i'm trying to make.  if only i could talk for goodness sake.

lol um i like the poem