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yelling pressuring from both sides

his voice is drowned by all else

they think their lives are so much harder.

as they scold him with their whip lashing words.

anger burning up inside.

because he has to please everyone

yelling pressuring from both sides

begging for another chance

they all say r****d

you god d**n loser

the urge to start screaming

because questioning their actions

means that hes giving an attitude

he has to say sorry

becuause he dont want to be punished

but he dont give a d**n

who cares if he punished for saying what he think

his voice needs to be heard

maybe you can listen to him for once

maybe you can feel his pain

of what he's going through!

maybe you can shudder

just liek he shudderd at your words

stop yelling at him!

you never have been on the other side

you don't know him at all

Answer 1

i am too old to relate but it sounds like this kid is really tormented

Answer 2

The poem is awesome, I like the vivid thoughts and emotions it does carry with it.

One other thing, I really liked the way you answered Cracky's question:  "how do I get rid of her." .... it was really well ment, thought out and .... well how do i say it .... you floored me (in a good way).

So ... just wanted to say, keep up the great work.  Yout got a smile out of me.