Is this a good Application?

Question

[for a doggy day care assistant,if not what can I do to improve it]

Hello,

I was sending this message in response to your post on Craig's List would be very interested in working for you're company however I am only fourteen so I do not know if that would be a problem,I've owned many dogs in the past,and I am a animal lover.I have transportation to get back and forth from work every day so that is not a problem.I do not have a resume seeing as I am only fourteen and have had no prior work experiance.As far as hours ago I am avaliable at anytime.I would really appreciate if you took my application in to consideration,I am a very outgoing,entergetic,friendly person and I think I would do a wonderful job being a doggy day care assistant.

Marissa[last name]

Cell Phone# Home Phone#

Answer 1

It's not bad for a fourteen year old. But it could be a little better on spelling and grammar. Why not go over it again and check for mistakes. The content and impression you give is fine. But see that first sentence; "I was sending". Not only is it wrong tense (in the past) but it just looks crass as well. It's not an endearing mistake, if you know what I mean. "I am sending" or "I am writing" or just leave it out, when they receive the letter they will know you are writing! I am not being unnecessarily critical but if you really want the job, you best give it your best shot .

You're is short for you are you need "your"

Why not put I have instead of I've.

Back & forth maybe should be to & fro(m)

Transport instead of transportation (maybe)

Otherwise it's GOOD

Hope you get the job. Woof Woof!