Is this beter?

Question

I found it impressive

Her sunburnt skin was soaking slick

I found it suggestive

Her dolled up face was careless chic

It was her impresses

That I found in her interests

Of soul

And more

Of her aroma

Answer 1

Ruv It

Answer 2

It's perfect

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Answer 3

Your chic must be cheek

It was her impresses must be "It was through her impressiveness"

You finished your poem in a hanging form. And so as to make a rhyming, kindly add ....Of her aroma and aura.

Answer 4

beautiful :D

Answer 5

It doesn't sound so forced this time, but I think you lost some of the meaning in the first stanza.  And I don't think you need the last line.  "Of soul / And more" makes her aroma unimportant.  ^^