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Is this pome any good?

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alone when the heart is all a lone

i have the dream every night. i her voice comes to me tells me that she will be there. i try to find her i look every night in my dream world. she calls out to metelling me things of this life and the next. she whispers this world is not the real word. she tells me of a world of hope and love. when she talks of this worldi can not tell if this is the dream or if she is talking of the dream.after she tells of this world of love and hope i feel she is alone in this world. she is alone and she know that i am alone too.she trys to show me that her love can get to me and that am not alone but even if we send our love we are still alone.when we are alone we have time to show our dreams to the hollow world of deams and lies.

when all i know is a hollow world of lies how can i show her the love i have. how do i know if it is love i feel and not just a new dream. when a dream is all you have and know how do you tell if you are the dreamer or dream? how do i know if this is the dream or a hollow world of lies?

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  1. Aside from being full of typing errors and horrible punctuation... yeah, it's not great.  I know that term "poetry" is subjective, but this is just rambling.  Usually, poems make some sort of sense or have a theme or running narrative.  This just sounds like something you would have on your livejournal (back when people still used livejournal).  I would keep trying.  


  2. This is a travesty of incredible proportions; a euphoria of merry-go-round reflections and refractions. Collapse seems evident with every word.
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