Like my horse poem?

Question

haha. okay.

please dont laugh at it =)

it deals with racehorses though.. so enjoy and just tell me your opinions...

The gates fly open,

the horses lunge..

down the stretch,

around the first turn,

They all sure have..

A lot to learn

As they come around

the final turn,

One will rise,

above the rest,

To clearly prove..

he's the best.

He gets the flowers,

placed on his back,

To prove that he's..

the best on the track.

THE END

=)

i know! it wasn't that good, but oh well!

Answer 1

hey, I liked it. Very clever. Really comes from you and you only. Good job.

Answer 2

That was pretty good!! I like them short and rhyming

Answer 3

i liked it, but im not into horse raceing.

Answer 4

well.... it could use somemore deatails and it was bad

Answer 5

I like it actually but i might sound like an English teacher in saying you could use some more "poetic devices" like alliteration, and metaphors, and symbolism

Answer 6

yup : )

Answer 7

Good try...really kind of cute!

Answer 8

it was ok

Answer 9

that's a lovely poem--i love poems-you are very talented

Answer 10

Like it? I loved it... no actually I hated it. Mine's better...

Roses r red,

Violets r blue,

Horses were made,

To turn into glue.

(Just kidding, I like horses, but I'm sure some1 will complain anyway)

Answer 11

i liked it

Answer 12

Good job!!

Answer 13

Sounds like a first draft. No polishing. Try harder. You can do better.

Answer 14

wow nice poem! great work! =) love the rhyming, it flows nicely.

Answer 15

Cute  

now do one for Barbaro

Answer 16

It was cute! A little bit amateur, but its better than I could write it!! You have a lot of potential talent!! Keep writing!! :D

Answer 17

its ok

Answer 18

I love it how did you come with it,did you have for school of did you just do it because.thats really good