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My Poem....do you like it?

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Retribution

Celestial bodies fall to the Earth and scorch my freshly bathed skin

Flames engulf me in infrared madness

Screaming...who is screaming?

I cannot tell my own voice from the masses.

All the world falls silent in hot death

lives are extinguished by unseen powers

That reside in pretend fortresses..

I float above the carnage,

From where these wings came I do not know

I am painless, without substance.

I see my earth, dead and withered in an apocalyptic storm

seemingly screaming am I

writhing as I descend towards destruction

clawing at the air for salvation

realizing I have no sanctuary

from this imminent death

Accept your fate, your destiny as I die

crumpled bones without dignity

scattered amongst millions

a horrifying revenge for years of spite.

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  1. its very good, you describe it well. and its not just simple, it has depth. nice work!

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  2. i like it. its really good.

  3. The poem itself is deep and has good imagery.  

    Retribution is hard to define, what has to be done or how far must one go,  you did illustrate a very broad word poetically.  I think the poem is unique and full of hopelessness.

    I like it.

  4. Very good.  It draws you in.

  5. I like it.

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