Need constructive criticism on my poem

Question

please tell me what you think of this poem; more specifically, is it cliched/lame/corny? be honest. thanks. oh and if your'e just going to write something lame in an attempt to be funny, save your time and grow the f*** up.

The moments in my year

Were the alcohol in a bottle

As I drank alone and

I drank with friends

Each sip a separate moment

And every night its own end

I went abroad in the spring

A fresh country and new people

I missed you so wildly

The sweetest drinks

Poured into a glass of angst

And now that I have you back

I drink with you and I drink for you

Butterflies moving full throttle

I’m lucky you’re mine

But luckier to say,

Cheers to a new bottle.

Answer 1

The message in it is a little unclear. The beginning sounds like the beginning of a depressed person drinking their life away. The middle as if the person found someone or something that made him happy, but the end ....is unclear. I do like the lines "Each sip a separate moment and every night its own end" and "The sweetest drinks poured into a glass of august."  Try to make your story a little bit more clearer. If it is new found love you are speaking of then try putting it in the same pa-sass that you have done so well with the lines above.