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Ok. . . i finished this poem

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i was writing a poem, and was advised to add more to it. so here it is.

The tips of the Sun's fingers touched the lake,

Little Diamonds dance, over the water in a wake.

A Breeze races across the skies,

Spreading gossip; lies.

The Weeping Willow tossing its arms in dance,

Beautiful, even at a glance.

Shadows join the Willow's Dance

Over the Water's stance

Feet thud over the packed earth;

The Earth's very heart beat

In joyful Murth

Come to meet

At the Lake's Edge

The Waves licked at the Shore

Tasting the Sand

Listening to the Band

That was the Sound of the Earth Breathing

That sound that was never ceasing

The heart beat

The sound of feet

The breeze blowing

The Sun glowing

Life, breathing

never ceasing

tell me what you think

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  1. wow that was awesome i wish i could write poems like that i give it 2 thumbs up cuz datz all the thumbs i have lol  


  2. Beautiful!!!

  3. very nice, uplifting, every poem I read today was a downer.  You should run it through a spell checker and then submit it to http://www.coldcoldlaw.com

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