Opinions on poem...?

Question

What do you think about this poem?

Everytime I see you cry

Everytime I see you angry

I want to punch you

I'm sorry but it's true

Don't show any emotion now

How can you cry and seek sympanthy

when you never even thought about

the people around you?

You're so clever

So popular and everyone loves you

But have you ever thought about the people that matter?

The ones you take for granted

You've always ignored them

And they're so lonely now

It's only gonna get worse

and you know it

So please please I beg of you

For once don't be so selfish

Help them, help me

Answer 1

I was gonna say "cry" and "angry" don't rhyme because I only read the first block and I thought it was an aabb pattern, but then I realized most of it doesn't rhyme xD

Answer 2

it doesn't flow very well. also, you have a good idea, but branch out so it doesnt sound as cliche

Answer 3

so---so