POEM 2, good or bad?

Question

GIVING YOU ALL MY LOVE

I have loved before

I promise I love you more

Other loves are just friends

Our love will never end

What is it that we feel?

Love between two people thats real

Anyone can look at us and say it won't last

I can prove that wrong real fast

When you talk to me my body is light

My body tingles and it feels all right

My heart is lifted and I cry

I'm in love with you and know why

I will hold your heart as long as you have mine

A broken path finally in a straight line

Hold hands and never let go

Kiss and the love will show

We'll be together and never fall out of love

Because the title of this poem above

Shows you I am giving you all my love.

Answer 1

Is too elemental for me, too basic. Needs some arrangements.

Answer 2

it's ok, it's easy to follow.

but it is so cliched.

pretty much every poem out there is cliched, just because people tend to write about the same things. next time, try writing about something else, maybe a metaphor of love, instead of just plain love.

you expressed your emotion beautifully, but it just doesn't seem to flow as well as it should.

keep at it though, you have some potential.

but this wasn't the best poem i've heard.

Answer 3

Very good that has to be one of the best poems I have read in awhile. Keep writting and the grade I would give you for this poem is an A+. Take care. =)

Answer 4

not so good