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These are my lyrics, not Channel zero by Canibus like my last question. lol. I had his beat in mind when i wrote this so it would be sung to a similar beat. I had to go somewhere between the first and second verse so the flow is slightly off. this is just a rough version, might still have typos.

This was written in complete silence, straight through almost like a freestyle. Still needs a clean-up and some mods, just thought id get an opinion. Talks about end of world 2012, and how we should be good and then the end wont matter. please rate 1-10 enjoy. p.s. this is my first rap.

Yea sometimes our destiny can be confusin

and our reality can be an illusion

Yo I'm talkin bout the future

in a few years

a time that can bring happiness or millions of tears

Yea Demcember twenty first, 2012

a date surrounded in mystery that leaves us compelled

to know the truth

about if life on this planet will be goin

and if God himself will be showin

up to judge us for what we are

or if we'll get annihilated by a star

The mayans predicted this to be a year of transition

where our morals would change into a brand new system

Yea would thousands of years of our human legacy

be wiped away by this unknown prophecy

Yea will life continue, or our souls be born again

But wait!

A revelation- unto my soul- let me reveal to you

what God made sure I was told

Yea human beings livin their lifes

only dreamin about platinum and ice

Nobody wants to be a good samaritan

and all governments controlled by totalitarians

Corruption from the bottom to the top of the ladder

Realizing the truth is all that really matters.

Corruption, evil, famine and disease

and no matter how much you pray to God and say please

can help you from what the lord has planned

because were all guilty with blood on our hands

Yea beneath the shiny veneer lurks pure evil

they do things that aren't moral or legal

Why?

because we sat back and did nothin

they took away our freedom for safety

but they were only bluffin

Everything is a setup

a play before performed before your eyes

and the final act will end with a surprise

Yea all the prophecies are right

december 21st will be a h**l of a night

Wait Im gettin ahead of myself with these rhymes

lets rewind and take a look at modern times.

Racism lurks round every corner

Someone pick up the phone call the coroner

Obama-Osama

Nah!

Osamas at the white house now,

havin lunch with the real problem

Over In Iraq, a war over oil

tension so hot it makes our blood boil

We should spend those billions

to defend our own soil!

Housing market, gas prices, and the reccession,

in only a few years we'll have a new great depression

But theres one thing you must realize

that the news you hear is all a bunch of lies.

In a few short years- they'll put a chip in your arm

something that won't bring good-but cause harm

Can't you see it's the mark of the beast

or see its slavery in the least

yo cant you tell

Revelation says without this mark

you cant buy or sell

Want to know the saddest thing

you wont fight it

your brains been conditioned

so you cant see wrong from right

NAU and the Amero

i wont be one of the sheeple

id rather die a hero

Listen to me you blind puppets

cant you hear God's horsemen playin their trumpets?

Yo now lets get down to business

what Im sayin should end up in Giuness

for the most truth said in less than 5 minutes

Do yall really want the ansawers

grab your pen and paper

the turth will hit you harder than cancer

Let me quote a Revelation line

"That no man shall know the place and time"

You wont know when God comes to judge you for your crimes

Which means 2012 is just one of their lies

So whats is my advice to you

simple-live your life how you want to

Do unto others as you would have done to you

Ask yourself this

If I was to die today,

did I live my life the holy and right way

When you walked home from work yesterday

and heard screams from a dark alley way

From a young lady

did you go to help her and see what was wrong

or just keep walkin your own way-quietly humming a song

Maybe this is why we fear the end of the world

cause we dont do what moses was told

we shut ourselves out and make our souls cold

thinkin we can be better than God

so we act bold

God is speaking to me now through my brain

He says were all headed on a one way train

the last switch-gate is comin up fast

and if we dont switch tracks

the human race wont last

Turn away from the devil and all of his evil

believe in God and be one of his people

So this is what I say to you

Be kind to yourself, your family, and your friends too

Live everyday like it was your last

and you wont worry bout the future and the past

Then you you can live in the present

and know thats God's greatest gift

Enjoy it and dont resent it

And until your standin in heaven

getting judged before him

remember this phrase

Carpe diem.

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  1. I have to say, I am impressed.


  2. Ah shnap! Dats sum dope stuff right thurr! You finna record it an make into a real song? Love ta hear it!

  3. hahahaha wow ! Fantastic......... really great! i appreciate it...... especially the politic's one  

  4. Pretty good but some rhymes in a bar will have more words then the other which means you need fillers.

    Example:

    Yea Demcember twenty first, 2012

    a date surrounded in mystery that leaves us compelled

    to know the truth

    about if life on this planet will be goin

    and if God himself will be showin

    up to judge us for what we are

    Sopme parts are shorter then others you need to keep it even

  5. its pretty good but doesnt quite flow like it could. work on it a likkle more and thats pretty fly ****

  6. What is up with people and 2012??? d**n! Lyrics ain't bad tho.

  7. Dawg I don't think anyone can respect your s h i t after your last question with someone else's lyrics.I think its best if you don't post here anymore you got a lot to learn.
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