Please read and react?

Question

my pen is crying again

weak and full of rage

too scared to make a rightous stand

he weeps upon this page

shamed and full of loathing

petrified is he

much too condescending

for a simple man like me

I laugh inspite of insults

don the mask of glee

my pen is homicidal

but i assure you its not me

flashes of familiar

gone before you blink

lies weigh upon my shoulder

but the truth is in the ink

Answer 1

I love it :D

The last line is perfect.

Answer 2

Well I do not consider myself an expert at critiquing this type of thing but I will give it a try. I am not sure what you are trying to say you are obviously tormented. But I do feel you have a talent for righting . But I feel like it is a series of random thoughts a stream of conscience that just need to be tied together with a meaning. Or maybe I am just missing the the meaning. Never the less it shows talent and I would keep righting if I were you.  

Answer 3

I absolutely love the last line!

Answer 4

wow, wow, wow  

Answer 5

Wow.. The Ink? Nice.

Very nice poem, it caught me the moment I saw 'pen'.  

Answer 6

Awesome! This rocks! keep on writing dudio!

Ooooooh, The pen sounds scary!

Answer 7

it's great! i love it, it's very... i don't know, it's kind of touching actually even though it's about a pen  

Answer 8

It is gr8.nice poem with a reasonable topic.Well Done!!

Answer 9

i would like to refer to myself as an extremely lucky person for  wintnessing such a sincere case of extraordinary poetry.  why, i was so affected i had to write a little poem my self (though it is no where near as good as your own!)

all is silent

all is still

your poetry has deepened

my very will