Poem I wrote spontaneously. Any good?

Question

Black ships on white shores,

They've gotta take a soul, and it might be yours.

You don't know where to look or what to fight,

These things you're running from, they've stolen your sight.

They took your voice too, now you can't speak,

You're easy to control, they've left you so weak.

You must take back your tongue and take back your eyes,

Because without them, the revolution dies.

Answer 1

doesn't feel personal

Answer 2

not gonna lie. that's pretty sweet.

I really like the ending.

Answer 3

Im not really into poetry but i thought that was actually really good. im gona star it.

Answer 4

YES, I found it really good! it ryhmes(which i love) and goes together very well! are you a poet??

Answer 5

I love it :)

Answer 6

I'm not an expert on poetry but I do love poetry.

I've read this about 4 or 5 times now. It reads a little rough but I like it. I think with perhaps some tweaking it could be even better.

Answer 7

is it talking about death?