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Poem/ poetry care?

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i worte a poem let me know what u think love criticism an at all thank you its called care

all i ever did was care

didnt matter when or where

Whenever she needed me i was there

ur girl cant even compare

when she left i got a scare

there was no way i could prepare

so i looked at the skies and i did declare,

Why is life so unfair?

why cant me and her be a pair?

i was so mad that i could tear

my head away from my hair

i wanted to cry and i want to swear

in the end all i did was stare

at the empty spot in the chair

then i bowed my head in despair,

and asked god in silent prayer

why did i even care?

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  1. ,Now put into a song;Why---why---did i even care--- i should of been more prepared---said a silent prayer--- am it got a little bit scared---i declared life,s unfair---bow my head in despair----i cry why we can not be a pair--girl you cant compare how many times i was there---did it matter when or where---she left my life is empty---my eye had a tear--- i pull out my hair---i ask why i even care ---Layla----care-----


  2. It is horrible. Forced rhyming of the last word of every line is not the best way to write a poem.
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