Poem: "Moment". Comment?

Question

The sun glints on the wrinkled silver sea

And the seagulls' hilarious squawk and bleat

Rings out into silence over the bay

Where the tide has wiped the marks of our feet.

The peace is massive, sinks into our heart

With perfect joy of the fading day

So we arise over the humdrum art

Of small talk and random sounds on the way.

We're hand in hand, the way it's meant to be.

Let's hug this moment, now, just you and me.

Answer 1

Good imagery.

I would take the word 'is' and substitute a comma in verse two and change the word 'arise' to float/glide/pass/sail. (But then it's not my poem)

You have caught a lovely moment here, though.Well done.

Answer 2

This is strictly from Amateursville, man. It takes more than a few rhymes to make a poem.

Answer 3

It's beautiful...Kudos!!

Answer 4

You didn't say who wrote it

Answer 5

Awe this is so amazing!

You tied two awesome things together!

The ocean and love.

I can't wait to show this poem to my family!

Answer 6

its okay right under good. but good job though