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Question

paint the town red

enough with the crying moaning and regrets

its time to move on and forget

forgive the devil for hes bored of flying

save your heart because its dying

theres going to be more disapointments headed your way

so forget your problems and go on with your day

she didnt mean to hurt you ,she made a mistake

he said hes sorry forgive him for goodsake

paint the town red untill you feel alive

color the ocean blue then dive

do not regret the past for its nessacassry

do not be embass of yourflaws just pick them up and carry

then.............

paint the town red with ribbions and clovers

if your made a mistake erase and start over

sign amy

Answer 1

nice...... but, i think it can be even better with several word changes

Answer 2

I read it. I got it, it speaks out to people. Some people wouldn't know what it meant but I do.

Answer 3

Very nice good flow,  and thanks for sharing!! Cheers!!

he said hes sorry forgive him for goodsake

for goodness's sake --- feel that is what you meant!!!

Answer 4

i love it alot

Answer 5

I understand the concept but think it is too much; it seems like you have two poems there that you kind of mixed together. I kind of lacks cohesion.  Maybe if your references and images were different or more ambiguous it would help I'm not sure but thus far it seems a little off. Also some of you word order and choices and a bit jumbled they don't have a smooth flow.  Not a bad attempt though.

Answer 6

What's your question?.....I read your "poem" .....I'm sorry, were we supposed to critique it? I don't understand.