Rate my newest lyrics?

Question

it's called dont tell me it'sover

verse 1

dont tell me its over because man you wrong

even if I aint sober i'll keep going on

I will get my self shining more then the sun

I may be c**p at rhyming but I aint done

I will take the road untill I sucess

cant go home cant take a rest

you trying to tell me I will not acheive

but your dying to tell me I will suceed

so dont rush your thoughts the journey aint over

dont say my score is naught because i'll get out this rover

chorus 2x

you cant tell me it's over because the journey still goes on

put me in a coma if I am truly wrong

I will start to shine more then the sun

and I wont be as dark as night

so dont tell me it's over

because your not right

verse 2

the journey will be hard but i'll try to sucess

I cant stay in the dark I got to try my best

my rhymes to me are as precious as diamonds

and there going to be always shining

this is not the the final project not just yet

all i'm doing now is posting it on the internet

I work so hard for sucess I got to be perfect

I got to be at my best to get respect

I need my flow to be colder then snow

so dont tell me it's over because look at my flow

you just trying to put me down but that wont work

always pushing me around but that wont hurt

man look at you now your all sown up

thanks to my sucess your down so you cant tell me its over

chorus 2x

you cant tell me it's over because the journey still goes on

put me in a coma if I am truly wrong

I will start to shine more then the sun

and I wont be as dark as night

so dont tell me it's over

because your not right

Answer 1

Yeah this wasn't good at all.  But keep writing and try to improve, because you will only get better.

Answer 2

6 out of 10

Answer 3

Woahh sorry about dis but you need to know that was terrible if you wanna really make it in dis industry you gotta expand your vocabulary use a dictionary when you right get some bigger words make it interesting im not tryna be mean im tryna help you gotta take harsh  critique to make it big gudd luck

Answer 4

pretty good

Answer 5

why dnt you make fun lyrics that people like to listen to?