Read my introduction paragraph?

Question

long story short, i'm comparing the life of a teenager living through WWII and the life of a teen living through the iraq war.

[stating the differences]

any advice/comments/help would be appreciated.

thankss :)

intro para listed below.

Answer 1

Very nice.  I would spell "colossal" right though and maybe rephrase that sentence.  Possibly something like:  "Despite the obvious similarities, the differences are all too apparent to even the most casual observer."  Overall it sounds really good so far.