Something i wrote.... your opinion?

Question

idk why i wrote this... it's just everything that has been on my mind lately & i needed to let it out... it's not really done or anything....but just tell me what you think or something...

He doesn't have it easy. His parents are hardly every home. He's drunk almost every night, illegal drugs, and gang fights. A high school drop out is what he'll become if he doesn't change his ways. He wishes for the world, yet doesn't know what to do, because s*x rules his life and leaves him dazed and confused. He dreams of his future and reminisces his past and all this time he's been going down the wrong path. I only want to help him and show him I care. I want to be his best friend and stay by his side through thick and thin. I wish I could give him the life he dreams of and the one he deserves. with a house on a hill and the kids in the yard, chasing the soccer ball down the boulevard. A Lamborghini in the driveway right next to his wife's Corvette. He's not a bad kid, he was just never taught right from wrong. He's not a bad kid deep down inside. He's the sweetest guy I know, and his only wish is to find true love and live happily ever after in his very own fairy tail with the girl of his dreams. He's just misunderstood, and lost in between the lies of this world. So he turns to drugs and alcohol to cover up this not so perfect life of his. Not realizing that he's only making matters worse....

Answer 1

Its good! but sad.

Answer 2

wow i dont know what to say

that's really moving

who ever he is, i hope you can help him  

Answer 3

The main character sounds like a young adult experimenting with all the good and bad in life.  If that's the case, let's hope he goes on the right path, which you say he know.

If this is not the case, then he is involved with the wrong people, and self-medicating to hide his depression of his 'lifestyle', whatever that may be.  Someone, probably you, needs to step up and hone his talent(s).  I don't think he is stupid.  Prove that to him.  Show him examples of lives gone bad, and lives gone good.

Best wishes.

Answer 4

That's a very good way of expressing how you feel is poetry. I write my own however and it gets published in some highschool books. I think this is very good.

This is obviously hard for you, because you are stuck lost and confused and don't know exacly how to deal with this guy.

I think maybe you should try to be his friend and gradually talk to him and ask him his opinion on things. Ask him his views on drugs, s*x, family, ect. Try to see if you can give him advice, explain to him what drugs do to you and what s*x can do to you such as sexually transmitted diseases and or getting someone pregnet. As far as his family goes all you can do is try to talk to him about it and you can be his family. Remind him that family doesnt have to be blood related. It can be very close friends.

It also says you kinda like this guy, see if you can first become friends with him and then see what kind of relationship he wants with you and see exacly how he feels.

Good luck to you.