Too babyish?

Question

Is this to babyish or not? When we’d unpacked our suit cases, we decided to got to the beach. The rain had stopped now so we decided to make the most of it. It wasn’t a short walk from the hotel to the beach at all. When we got there, Liz rolled out the towel and lied down. I told her she wouldn’t get a tan but she didn’t listen. She looked a right sight in her bikini top and shorts when it had finished raining! Mike was making formula 1 racing cars out of sand, Clara was making beautiful ruins of sandcastles next to Mike, which I kept squashing, and Kirsty was paddling in the freezing cold sea. I tried it to and almost got washed away! Who likes it? The chapters called a trip to the seaside, by me!! (In this I am a cat)

need anything added to it?

Answer 1

Need to add a point to this, is it a question, an essay, a short story, start of a children's book???????

Answer 2

i dont think it is to babyish but i wud describe the scene more. wat was the beach like, wat was the weather like. stuff like that.

Answer 3

I only got a bit of that..