Revised part of my epic. please comment.?

Question

Upon soaring wings and silvery feathers

The knight landed on the vast plain

Sitting on a stout but elegant beast

He cautiously followed the narrow lane

His mount, a creature none had yet seen

Strolled with pride, its head held high

An ingenious blend of many beasts

Unchallenged on land, a lord of the sky

Its large beak was crooked and black

Its lion-like mane, so pure and white

its cry louder than a sky full of gulls

with its sharp, amber eyes piercing bright

An old lone-oak stood by the lane

With its thick boughs outspread

Its bark was full of q***r engravings

That could not be easily read

“Here we shall rest for a while”

Said the knight to his mount

And he retreated to the shades

To lie on the cool ground

The cool shades were all sacred

For the bright sun was ablaze

And the gleaming, golden acorns,

Forced every eye to gaze

For they were all enchanted fruits

The deed of the evil king

The trees were all cursed to their roots

To charm every earthly being

The acorns brought a hazy sleep

To the weary, careless knight

And he was dragged into vague dreams

For their charm was hard to fight

Answer 1

My revised version:

The first three stanzas are perfect.

An old lone-oak stood by the lane

With thick boughs outspread

Its bark covered with q***r engravings

That could not be easily read

“Here we shall rest for a while,”

Stated the knight to his mount

And he retreated to the shade,

To lie on the cool ground.

The sharp black (you already used cool just in the last line) shades were sacred

For the bright sun was ablaze,

And the gleaming, golden acorns,

Forced every eye to gaze

They were all enchanted fruits,

The deed of an evil king

The trees had all been cursed to their roots

To charm every earthly being.

The acorns brought a hazy sleep,

To the weary, careless knight,

And he was dragged into vague, muddled dreams,

Their charm he could not fight.

Wonderful writing again! I applaud you for your perseverance!

Answer 2

It's alright!!!

Answer 3

Your beginning is outstanding...it tends to fall apart a little later on though.  Third stanza, first line...not enough beats...find a modifier for "black" or change the word order so it reads, "it's beak was large, crooked and black"...and add "much" before "louder" to correct the beats in that line.  After this, it stumbles...I'd suggest you keep editing as you did the first three stanzas...you're on the right track.