SOME PEOPLE - please comment on my poem!?

Question

SOME PEOPLE

My weary eyes won’t let me weep

Wide open, I can’t just sleep

I can’t believe what I’ve seen today

I can’t conceive what some people say

Accusations of the air they breathe

Minor tragedies of which they seethe

Beware of these howling drama seekers

One slip up and you’ll be down to your sneakers

She says she is God’s chosen healer

She says she cares about all who meet her

Well maybe it’s true for a minute or two

You’ll be her best friend until she decides to sue

Some people just don’t understand

I show compassion and give them a hand

But when my help is thrown out and there’s spit on my palm

It just makes me doubt any future of calm

Nothing I say is good enough for these people

Always something to pick apart or staple

All day long nonsense I’m being fed

All night long I ponder what I should have said

All I can hope for is a new day, a new chance

And some people who won’t blow up at a glance

Out there somewhere where I can’t see

There are some people just like me.

Answer 1

The rhyming is a little simple, I'd like some more complex words and rhyming. I like your format though, and try adding some more punctuation. Cheers!

Answer 2

I think it is good a bit childish on the rymes but a great poem

here is my  poem im 11 and its about the Govermant. Need load of reeplies

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Answer 3

i hope you keep writing that is amazing!

so true, I love the message you get across

check out my poems :)

Answer 4

I liked it a lot. You have a lot of talent!

I loved it. You should write a book. ;) I would definitely buy it!

If you can, please check my poems. They are just two because i just started writting. I would like to hear your opinion.

Hopefully I helped! :)

Answer 5

This is beautiful but I couldn't imagine it in a poetry book. It's more like the lyrics of a song...perhaps because of the rhymes. The inspiration is contemporary but the form is "classical" and that exists today only in the world of the songs...I think so. If you found someone to compose a music on this poem...;)

Answer 6

very nice inspirational love it keep writing

Answer 7

It seems kind of childish, but I like the idea.