Say how good this poem(haiku) is..?

Question

you can be,

you can be,

how cheap you can be,

but the bee,

but the bee,

will sting you on the tee....

---humbly, Stephen Marshall...

Answer 1

i like the first three lines, but i think the last three dont really go with it. a haiku doesnt have to rhyme.

Answer 2

it was nice you did 3,5,3 it was cool

Answer 3

horrible

Answer 4

A haiku has 17 syllables in total English version.

broken up in 5'7'5 = 3 Lines, 5 syllables top and bottom and 7 syllables in the middle. It also must contain a season. winter, summer, autumn or spring.

Here is a site that can help you learn haiku.

http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/ha...

This should help you. Cheers. : )

Answer 5

write few more lines.This will be a good poem

Answer 6

Errrr....no.

Answer 7

lol well not that good. about 3/10 .

use some bigger words. u have mostly 3 letter words.

Answer 8

i think it sucks sorry but it does

Answer 9

Not terrible but you might want to work on it.

Answer 10

A haiku has three lines, usually with the first with five syllables, second with seven, third with five. Your poem is not a haiku, I'm sorry.

Furthermore, it doesn't exactly make sense, "You can be/You can be/How cheap you can be/but the bee/but the bee/will sting you on the tee..."

Plus, 'be' and 'bee' don't rhyme. You can look up haiku on the internet, there's sure to be tons of help floating around. You can read haikus too.

It doesn't have to be about a season, or anything in particular, but it's usually about nature or everyday things.

Answer 11

Isn't a haiku supposed to be three lines?  It's pretty good.

Answer 12

Not a Haiku. Even though your form is basically wrong...should be three lines....your count is wrong.

It doesn't have to be 5-7-5, but I didn't read any meter that, otherwise, fits Haiku/Senryu....by the old Masters, or new.

Sorry!!! Revise it into one!! And, a Haiku usually must be associated with a season....as 'frog' denotes Spring.