Second opinion on a poem?

Question

Hey, I would love to hear some feedback about a poem I just wrote. It's about my friend who cuts herself. It may be a little dark, but that's kind of what I'm going for. Let me know what you think!

How can you help, when you don’t see the problems?

You will never see all the sides of me.

How can you tell me that you’re going to solve them?

When you know that I will soon bleed?

When you ignore these words I confide to you,

I know you can’t begin to understand,

But you’re only making me want to explain

All the things that I’ve done with these hands.

Though fragile and small, they may soon steal it all,

Away from you for good.

You may not see, what they’re doing to me,

And you wouldn’t help if you could.

And when it all becomes too much,

If I go the final mile

I’ll know there’s someone I have touched,

While on this earth for a short while.

Answer 1

I absolutely love it. It makes you understand the emotions someone goes through.  

Answer 2

i thought it rocked!!!!!!!! but i was kinda wondering are you the girl who cuts herself or the "you" in the poem if that makes sense but i thought it was great

read my poem plz tell me what you think

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Answer 3

Interesting...I like it.

Answer 4

WOW that is really good. It just makes you think. WOW that's awesome. Haha it is dark.  

Answer 5

It's very deep and intense. The emotions are clearly showed, I like it a lot. I'm sorry about what your friend is going through.  

Answer 6

thats pretty intense and good. and sorry about what your friend is doing i hope she gets over it.

Answer 7

What..?  We have two separate poems.  Ran out of steam toward the end did you?

It isn't very good.  I think you loose impact when you force a rhyme.  The second section is probably the best.