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Short poem I am working on--Thoughts?

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Obituary

Rest in Peace

I cannot afford

Precious luxury

I'll never cease

Too fully saturated

The bearer’s arms

Raging with fire

Soon overturning

I will never sleep

My soliloquy

Is not complete

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  1. Cool.  Very descriptive.  

    I write short poems

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  2. May the Lady live forever!  I can't see anything to change, the writing seems tight and your last two lines are terrific!!!

    Thanks for sharing this.

  3. it is Passionate in a way

  4. i think it's great.

    that you shouldt add or change anything too it.

    ibeleive it's talking about things you're having trouble with, especially in your life,

    cause when i read it, it seems like theres alot of feeling.

    ( hope it was the answer you were looking for )

    read mine?

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  5. Very nicely written, suiting for its topic!  Cheers!!

  6. The passing of one does carry obligations.  Well said.

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