Sleep of the dawn?

Question

falling quick

fumble threw the stick garden.

pricks of concuss theology.

the madness of the inward biology.

twisted flocks

subconscious shocks.

low rider.

callused knuckle clenched.

gear shift stretched.

the visions fly by.

but Bern threw the dirt as they die.

rebirth of self.

that is yet to see.

a splatter of who we look back and long to free.

dance and flow in the currant.

blink .

smash, turbulent ascent.

Miltie layer

becoming the self slayer.

peal the funyon.

and Spackle self hypocrisy.

eating your self to live

Answer 1

I like. The more you read, the more you see.

Answer 2

Just flat WOW!

And you proved what I'd thought.....good to go...and submit!

Absolutely raises questions, does not 'tell', but 'shows', lets the reader interpret...excellent!

Multi-layered...multi...