So I'm trying to write a story?

Question

and was wondering if you might wanna read it and tell me what you think! You don't have to read it all, but if you read any, just tell me what you though! And it's NOT done yet. :)

http://www.fictioncentral.net/viewstory.php?sid=154194&i=1

Read and reveiw? Thanks.

Answer 1

how oldare you? that was touching! my heart exploded with envy as i read it, for i wish i could be so longingly good at writing!!

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Answer 2

It's good! I like it. Part one was my favorite, the begging tugged me in. :] :] :], keep it up!

Answer 3

I loved it!

It was amazing.

I couldn't stop reading!

Keep it up :)

Answer 4

4.5 Stars, because i didn't really know what was going on, i know thats how the story is supposed to go though.

Keep working on it, that story is really good!