So what do u think about the poem i wrote?

Question

Title: It's show time!!!

Everything change in the war

The baby’s smile even

Can we stop it now?

Can we live in peace? Without crying!

Without shouting!

Without blood and thrill!

Maybe what we want

...is just a dream

...is just a hope

But why we can’t try?

Why we couldn’t just find the key?

Let’s save the world!

Let’s vanish darkness!

Let’s beat it!

I’m sure you can hear me war

So, go away for never come back

Go away for never come back

I’m sure you can disguise all the time

But I know who you are

What about killing fields?

What about torturing people?

What about capturing animals?

What about spreading fair?

What about children dying?

We won’t let you play your game again

Because this time we’ll beat you

Are you ready?

It’s show time …!!!

Answer 1

For an honest opinion, I do not think you will ever make money from your poetry.

However, please not let me discourage you.  You have made an attempt which most people never get around to doing.

Continue if it helps you relax and if it is your hobby.

Answer 2

It is good. Click on http://www.poem7.com to enter it in free contest to win big money. Good luck.