So what do you think of this poem? Its for one of my stories..?

Question

"Each times I gaze upon you, I lose my breath.

Your hazel eyes sparkle with life and I can see your soul shining through. Your eyes are bright as the stars and the moon. Standing here right next to you feels so right yet a part of me feel guilty. I know that deeply inside we were meant to be."

Its for my novel that's half complete....Think along the line of Twilight but no vampires.

Answer 1

it's really nice! i hope your book turns out very well

Answer 2

It's a good poem. I assume you know to put in a better format though. LOL. I really hope all things go well for your novel...I can only imagine how good it is seeing as how the poem is really good. :)