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Song lyrics (tried something different)?

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ok i usually write about sad stuff like breakups and being a freak and stuff so i thought this time id try and write a song where its not doom and gloom, its supposed to be a love song, but more of a i want you kinda thing lol. this is the 1st time ive tried something like this so if it sucks dont go oh you f*cking suck go die lol just lke direct me on how to improve, i only accept constructive critisim not insults =]

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[v1]

shes got you wrapped around her finger

shes got you where she wants you now

shes a user and a loser

she only wants one thing

she'll drop you just like that

and you wont realise

but she'll take you by suprise!

[chorus]

im the one you want

the one you need

the one who loves you for you

id be there for you

never let you down

she's out just to destroy you

and you need to cut her out

[v2]

shes got you strung up oh so high

and she cant wait to cut you down

she only wants you just to play you

for her sick amusement games

and when shes got bored

she'll tell you that its over

you may be blinded by love

but i can see right through her!

[chorus]

[bridge thing]

shes a poison

a temptation

but it wont end well

she'll trip you up

and make you fall

and i'll have to pick up the pieces again!

YEH YEH YEH

[instrumental]

im the one you want -------[soft part]

the one you need

the one who loves you for you-------[builds up]

id be there for you

never let you down

shes out just to destroy you

and u need to cut her out!

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  1. I don't really have any criticism other than the "you need to cut her out" part. It almost doesn't fit? I don't know lol, maybe it's cause I don't have a beat to go with the words but other than that I think the lyrics are fine.

    GJ and GL:)

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