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Carl Thomas had never been so relieved in his whole life. He was walking through the prison gates, not sure whether to smile or keep a straight face. The guard had an unpleasant expression on his face, as he opened the gate; Carl passed him with a sly grin.
‘Stay out of here!’ he shouted, slamming the gate, obviously annoyed.
Carl was too happy to say anything. This was the start of his new life, and no one was going to stand in his way.
It had all started a year ago when he’d met Steve at college, cool and a babe magnet. Carl immediately thought that this was someone he wanted to be mates with. A smooth talker and a charmer, it was easy to see why girls fell for him. Steve could have any woman he wanted, his toned muscely body and perfect features made him irresistible. Steve soon warmed to Carl but he didn’t see him doing the things he got up to. On the outside Steve was very much the hard man reputation he’d strived to be, but deep down he knew he had problems, ones that he had no idea how to face.
Steve was a criminal, he didn’t like it, only the buzz it gave him. Slowly he was beginning to gain credit amongst the boys on his estate. His reputation with others was deteriorating fast, he didn’t have any friends, only acquaintances. Steve had quickly learned that the only person who you could trust in this business was yourself. Somehow, Steve thought he could trust Carl; something about him brought Steve to like him.
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