Story of an anorexic... should i make it a novel? ?

Question

OK so last night i had this dream, i had a dream about this girl around I'd say like 15 or 16 shes around maybe 5'1 and shes anorexic. so the dream is about this anorexic girl who lives in a small town in Maine but has a mansion. Her parents are rich so they are never home, she is home one day and she decides she wants to talk to her parents but when she sits down to talk to them, they get up and leave when the young girl gets up and asks where they are going they tell her on vacation. but when they are on vacation she decides she wants to go back to the dance studio and sign up again for ballet, she was the number one dancer in her whole studio 3 months ago but her parents made her quit to take piano. she was saving up money right when she quit so she has like 4000 dollars when she wants to sign up again. so she takes a taxi down to the ballet studio about 2 miles from her house, she pays the driver and goes in to sign up, and they welcome her back in with open arms. after practice the same day she asks her choreographer if she can take her to piano. she was really busy but told her that her son could take her, her son is 16 hes tan and has long curly hair he looks like a surfer, he has pretty sea green eyes and perfect straight white teeth. they get into his black Lamborghini. and he asks her her name and where she is from when she says that she lives up the way in the mansion, he looks at her stunned and says oh. but he kept talking to her and for once she felt like she was 15 not like she was a middle aged mom, and when they got to her piano lesson studio they were 30 minuets early so he asks her if shes hungry. she obviously says that she isn't, and he takes her down the street to this nice cafe and the guy at the front greets him by name and said that he had a feeling he would come in, the boy introduces her to the waiter and seats them, he orders for her and she doesn't want to hurt his feelings but she doesn't think she deserves food. so she just pushes it away and says shes not hungry he catches her hand and asks her when the last time she ate was, she didn't answer and he told her that it would hurt him really bad if she didn't eat the wonderful food he ordered for her. the he told her not to worry that it wasn't fattening, she just took the food and quickly shoved a piece of salmon in her mouth. he was so happy that he got her to eat that he couldnt stop smiling till he dropped her off and she walked into the building. he waited the whole time she was in her lesson, and when she got out she laughed and said what are you stalking me now, he just laughed and told her something like that, so she got in and he took her to her house, she asked him if he wanted to come in, she said nobody was there and reminded him it was only 4:30 so he took her up on her offer and went into the house, when he got in his mouth dropped and she directed him to the living room, and he asked her if she was hungry, she just laughed and said your going to make me eat anyway so sure i am hungry, they went to the kitchen and he pulled out the food and some wine and she said no no no i don't drink, and he said just think of it as a celebration for eating! so she did. they sat there laughing and telling stories for hours, he got up from his side of the island table and sat by her to show her a card trick, and she laughed and he looked up and she met his gaze and stopped laughing, and he went in for a kiss, her lips lightly touched his and she pulled away and warned him that she's never kissed anyone before, "i have" he lied, and they kissed for a while and she pulled away gasping for air he laughed a light chuckle and said that it was getting late, she smiled and said yeah it is, he told her he needed to go home and she stopped laughing and looked at him, he kissed her again and picked her up and started walking the direction to her living room couch.

and that's the end.

Answer 1

If you really want to write about it then you should go ahead and do it!

Answer 2

sounds interesting  go for it  try to develop the characters so the reader can feel each character  and get to understand each persons thoughts, feelings and issues..   start a outline of the characters, issues and good luck  would love to read it when you are finished, i am retired english teacher and if you would like help with this please email me  i can assist your editing and proof reading  have fun and enjoy

Answer 3

definitely try to add stuff and put in a bunch of twists(just don't make it too confusing). i write too and like it. if u cant make it very long than u should write a couple of stories about girls with problems and their lives then put them into one book. like a book with 5 stories or something

Answer 4

I read half of it and it sounds pretty good.

Random advice: When you write a long text, cut it into paragraphs, it makes it MUCH easier to read.

Answer 5

too long didn't read

Answer 6

sounds like something I saw on the lifetime movie network

Answer 7

I didn't read all of it, too long.

But yes, you should write it down if it inspires you. Good rule for writers, if it inspires you, write it down so you don't forget it :)

Answer 8

long question lol

but i would go for it!

Answer 9

omg i dont mean to be rude but this is too long i tried to read it but it was too boring.

maybe once you make it a novel it will be interesting, but right now its c**p.

Answer 10

Well, I'm not trying to be mean and I don't want you to give up on your idea.  I think it may have potential but there are a few things in it that are confusing.  You said that she  was 16 but then when he was driving her to the lesson you said she felt like she was 15 and not like a middle aged mother.  You never once mentioned that she was a mother and how could she be middle aged if she's 16?  Also, when he said he needed to go home he should ask her if she'd like him to stay a little longer before he carries her off to the couch.    Since it is about   a young girl with a serious illness you shuold do a  lot of research on  the subject.  You could ask doctors about how patients re act to gettin g help.  How  does the body fall apart and how would the  character feel physically and emotionally?  Maybe you could have her go into a facility where she could get help.  Plus, how would the boy know if she never ate unless she told him so and you didn't menion that.  Plus, the fact that she's so young and that her parents travel so much, there should be someone else in the house with her an Aunt, an older sister or brother, a good friend of the family etc.  Write an outline of your story for example:  1.)  Her name is Ashley

2.) She's 16 and has a butler and housekeeper who take care of her while her parents travel

3.)  When she was 15 she started to hide what she eats and stops eating all together after a few months and people (close friends) are noticing but are afraid to say something

4.) If her parents are rich then she should have a limo driver or something so she won't be needing the teachers' son unless the driver got sick and couldn't pick  her up but called her to tell her that in enough time to figure out something

5.) Her closest friend Becka knows everything about her and her problem except latley she starting to become distant because Ashley can get emotional towards Beckas' lecturing and worrying and they got into a  huge fight and have not talked in almost a wk

6.) Her teachers' son has only been at the Studio once before and they briefly met just saying hello and have a good day/good lesson so on and so forth.

Do you get the idea?  Well, I hope I helped and like I said, it sounds like a good idea.  Good Luck.  

Answer 11

i dont care enough to read; make it a novel though why not?

Answer 12

Yes, you can do anything you want to do. Don't let anyone tell you that it is not possible. It is. Make that story into a novel.  

Answer 13

I will read it, hang on.

Okay I read it and I think the story has a lot of potential, but I don't quite understand how a problem of anorexia can be resolved so quickly and bam this guy's a hero.

Also if she's only 15 and the guy is any older than 17, this whole thing can be perceived the wrong way as he's taking advantage of her when the parents aren't home.  But that's not a big deal in this story.  Just make him 17 or make them a very special couple.

But I would add more detail about how he came to meet her and what exactly went through the girl's mind that made her able to eat after being anorexic just like that.

Even if it happened in a short period of time, elaborate on the girl's life and inform the reader about what it was that made that moment with the boy so special to her that she was able to make such a dramatic change of habit.   Discuss that for lots of pages in narrator without quotes.  And make it long eventhough the moment is short.

Get the reader into the anorexic girl's mind.  And don't call it "The Story of an Anorexic"

Call it something more like "A Life of Emptiness inside and outside."

Answer 14

I pulled out the food and kissed for awhile... that was what my eye caught. I think we're sharin' a brain here!

Since you already have the novel, why not try for a theme. . .

Answer 15

Yeah, make it into a book.

its really good [:

i say go for it. There's many people who like those kinds of books.

i would read it fersure.

if i found it.

Answer 16

i really like it, its somthin i would read but i would recomend that if you did write the book to make it longer way longer that was to short add somthing like wat made her becom anorxic why her parents made her quit ballat and y would her parents leave a 15 or 16 year old by her self in a mansion with out a babysitter to go on vaction and y did he lie about kissin anyone and u can change it from ur dream and u can make it her parents were busy and had no time for her and she felt like her mom thought she was fat or w.e and since there rich they perfer there child to play piano bla bla bla u no make it longer and detaild like y would u just ask ur ballat teacher for a ride and y was her son there make the girl have a connection with the ballat teacher and thats y she asked for a ride and the boy was there to do somthin u no like drop somthin off for his mom lets say ballat stuff dont leave so many unaswerd questions but the over all theme and story would be good and srry if i offended u in anyway changin ur story or anythin well i hope u do like mii ideas i wanted to be a writer but i no its tough so GOOD LUCK