Straight from the heart.?

Question

I hate the person you have become.

You made me love you and then you lied.

I gave you my everything and you dropped me like trash.

You said we would always talk about everything and now you refuse.

You promised to never hurt me, and then you scared me.

I hate the person I have become.

I lied to my parents to be with you.

I let my standards down because I thought you truly cared.

I put other priorities aside to support you.

And now all I have is a broken heart and nothing left to say but, I hate this you.

Answer 1

The only suggestion I have is leaving a space between stanzas when the subject changes. It doesn't seem to be like a poem, but a painful story taken straight from the Heart. Poetry is nothing but Inspiration and then the METAPHOR. When you write a Poem, dont forget to add some spice

I arranged it as this! Below

I hate the person you have become.

You made me love you and then lied.

I gave you my everything

and you left me all alone

You said we would always together walk

and talk about everything

now you refuse.

You promised to never hurt

Now

You never revert

I hate the person I have become.

I lied to my parents to be with you.

I never feared and

let my standards down

because I thought you truly cared.

I put other priorities aside

and decided

to support you.

now all I have is a broken heart

nothing left to say but, I hate this you

Answer 2

What it lacks in poetry it makes up in truth.

Not really a poem but a heartfelt statement, nonetheless.

Bravo.

Answer 3

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