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Question

How can I make these few sentences flow better and appeal to the reader more? what should I add/take out? what do you think about the scene in its entirety? Examples, suggestions and ideas welcomed! Please and thankyou!

The world began to spin in Sarah eyes. All around her, the walls, the ceilings, and even the blurry figure of Nathan went round and round her head. As soon as she had heard him confirm what her heart’s been dreading, a sharp pain tore through her head, and her arms and legs felt light and empty.

No…nonono, this isn’t happening! She cried out silently. NO!!!

Answer 1

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this is my redraft...

The world began to spin in Sarah's eyes.Surrounding her, the dark walls, the concaving ceilings, and even the distant figure of Nathan rotated rapidly through her mind. As soon as she had heard him confirm what she has been dreading, a sharp pain tore through her head and and a racing bullet scraped through her heart, her arms and legs feeling light and empty.

No... no no no, this CAN'T be happening! She cried out in agony. NO!!!