Suggestions on making it flow more? more symbolic meaning?

Question

How can I make this more symbolic? make more meaningful? any suggestions?

He set her up against the stars, laid out across the pitch black night sky.

For she was the only star he saw pooled in the ocean of the unknown.

To him she seemed miles away, yet at the same time there was no distance between them.

Her light burned bright, piercing to his eye.

He felt as if he had seen her in another life, for her image was unforgettable.

He wished on her every night, hoping they were more than just star-crossed lovers.

He wished she would fall from the sky for everyone to see, and land right into his arms.

He hoped that one day, his wish would come true.

Answer 1

Try taking out the direct references to stars.

For example:

She was one of the many lights that were across the black sky

But he only saw her out of all that reflected in the ocean

Miles away, yet right in front of him

Light burning bright in his eyes, piercing them with light

Looks good by the way!  Nice writing :)