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Summer haiku. feedback please?

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hot sun up above

white powdered sand underneath -

world passing me by

thanks. :)

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  1. Awesome.

    I like it.

    Really i do. Its cool!!

    My poem.

    http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;...


  2. You have done exactly what a Hai'ku is supposed to do--added a surprising and contrary third line.

    Although we cannot really imitate the Japanes in this form, you have done an excellent "American Ku."


  3. nice.

    suggestion to ad;

    between my toes the waves wreath

    while summer's walking by

  4. Very nice this piece

    some of the world stopped to read

    and gave you much praise.

  5. Great job, a little short, but you should really submit it to http://www.papertank.com and see what they think.

    I bet you could get a high rating for it on there!

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