Sunny Sundown....Do you like?

Question

I'm going to put this poem in verse by verse so it might be awhile until i get the whole thing

Those who worked Redtail mine were fed up with the boss

They gathered round the office like blackflies around a hoss

"No wages these 3 months" one cried, "Let's hand the lousy rat

He'll starve our very children, while himself gets fat.

And true enough, behind the doorm a fat man shook & wept

The wobbling bags beneath his eyes said that this man hadn't slept

A messenger had brought him word, that made him feel his age

Valdez, last night - the third straight month- had robbed the payroll stage.

Answer 1

I love it!

Answer 2

I like it but sometimes the rhyming is a bit forced. Poems don't always have to rhyme, but keep up the nice work! Overall it's good.

Answer 3

The first two lines were good, the rest was probably good too but I didn't feel like a reading such a long time...sry.