TEARS, plz comment on it... btw the poems called tears?

Question

could u comment on my poem and dont freak out i dont wanna comit suicide i just write about this stuff!

TEARS

Tears drip down my face,

their gone with out a trace!

How is nobody around?

My screaming never makes a sound!

How is life so miserable?

My skin is carve able!

Should I grab that knife?

Cuz' I wanna dice at my soul!

I might,

bash my head in with a poll.

The fog rolls over.

I'm trapped in this room.

This is gonna be my tomb.

All I see is a chair.

I'm almost out of air.

Tie a rope to the ceiling fan

theres never been any hope.

Stick my head through the loop.

I've been cooped up all my life.

Nobodies gonna miss me so ill jump off!

I never screamed or made a sound!

I dreamed bout this for so long.

I'm gone with out a trace.

All thats left are the tears that dripped down my face!

Answer 1

SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO GOOD i wish i could write poetry like that

Answer 2

childish

Answer 3

awww thats like sweet but sad.

it made my fell weird.

people might think your going mad

but we know your not.

unless you truely are weird

xx

Answer 4

Your poem has much emotions in it.

I see from one of the lines you are crying

out for someone.  

There is no one around to hear you.

This is sad.  

Being trapped is not very good because

this can lead to depression

The knife, rope, are a couple of ways

to end the pain.  

But that is not correct.