Teacher dont get it of my word.. what she mean and can u help me ?

Question

what she mean ? can u help for me ???

Great ideas about the causes of the fall of Rome. For a better grade please put this information into your own words. Also, add an introduction, conclusion, and transitional sentences to tie it all together. :)

The causes for the fall of Rome can be divided into four categories: political, military, economic, and social

Political: At any time that when a weak emperor ended up taking in control then, powerful generals would be often try and take advantage of the failing in power to try and take power themselves. As being in immediate connection

disgust and civil wars weak the empire over time.

Military: Over time, the quality of the Roman soldiers decreased, and the soldiers were forced to trust on non-Roman assistant, whose loyalty was not to be honest.

Economic: After the crisis of the Third Century, the extent network of Roman roads and highways was no longer decided upon as safe, and it was the Mediterranean decided as safe for trade. As a result, wealthy landowners started retooling their operations to be locally confidence- decreasing trade. As local operations became more confidence, they also felt more independent from Rome.

Social: From Constantine's to change on his deathbed to Christian, until Theodesius crushed the Pagans in the late 4th century, there was happen social as not trust between the Pagans and the Christians. Many influence that Christians wanted to remove all Pagan temples, statues, and other works, where the Pagans wanted to preserve them and not let the Christians to have power and control over the empire. This is not trust from led to several refuse the obey of the word.

Answer 1

Your introduction just states what the causes of Rome's fall were.  It didn't indicate if you were going to inform the reader if they were great ideas or if it contributed to anything we have now.  Your paragraphs are not consistent with the essay form.  They are more like definitions like you find in the dictionary.

Put this paper aside for your reference.  Then think about what great effects the causes of Rome's fall had on it's people, society, government etc and start from there.  Write it out like you are explaining something to someone who doesn't know anything about this subject...make sure you go from point to point so you don't

confuse the reader....

For example...list what the causes were...then tell me how they affected people, society, government etc, and tell me why that was so great...

In your conclusion just restate what you just told me...

You need to watch your words/sentences.  Sometimes you don't make any sense so think about what you are writing.

Good luck.

Answer 2

i cant take out tha time to read yo question

Answer 3

She means that she thinks you copied it from somewhere and that you did not write it yourself.

Also, she was expecting a proper essay format instead of just a list of factors. Formal essay format has an introduction, several paragraphs which contain the points you are trying to make, and a conclusion.

Answer 4

i dont understand fully you sounded so dumb and then you got smart all of a sudden.

Answer 5

um...... what is your question?

Answer 6

I'm a teacher. Your assignment was to talk about the "causes of Rome's fall". Your teacher wants you to choose 1 area that caused the fall--Soc, Poli, Eco or Mil. It is best to choose just one and not talk a little about all of them.

It seems you didn't use your own words to write your essay. Did you copy word-for-word from somewhere? You also didn't use the correct essay format, which is Introduction, then Body Paragraphs (should be 3), and Conclusion. To join the sentences & paragraphs, you need conjunctions or transition words (and, but, however, etc).