Teenage Story ... Idea?

Question

I started to randomly right and came out with:

"The closet was opened only a crack and I saw the two red garnet eyes glaring at me, waiting for me to close my own. In the quiet of night I heard his hoarse breath making deep gurgling sounds and my eyes met his. ‘If only I can make it to the closet,’ I thought. ‘I know he won’t be able to break free if I shut him in.’ I wanted to shut the door tight, lock away that glaring monster."

It's not one of my better written pieces, but it sparked an idea. I want to write a story about a teenage girl (most likely around the age of seventeen) who has something happen to her. I'm not sure what though. She's literally locking away the 'monster', which is really just a figment of her imagination. Like the monster in her closet is obviously not really there, but it's like her shutting away the monster in her closet is her trying to shut away her problem/memory. I was going to say she got raped or something of the story, but it seemed way to cliche.

Answer 1

I don't think the idea of "rape" is cliche. If you make it work, then it could be a powerful piece. Maybe she's on her own in a new appartment and she keeps having imaginations of her father's abusive behaviour.

Answer 2

That is a very intruiging paragraph. Maybe she got raped, that's not too cliche.  Or , maybe the monster took away some part of her, like her soul or her heart.

Answer 3

I think this is a fantastic story and I would love to hear more.

For my ideas on what would happen to her i would say that the monster she is "locking in" is something in the future, but somehow got bumped back into the past. Now the monster doesnt want to hurt her, he beleives she can help prevent all of this stuff that is going to happen.

idk hope it helps