Tell me about this peom, you know what you think about it>?

Question

i'll try and make it like a song

becuase internet users want it to belong

if you need another word

i am glad this was heard

i know it was really read

but a missed ryme i dread

so just let me finish

this dont work like a wish

so a little short i know i lied

but a least i know i really tried!

Answer 1

I think this is pointless and bad.  But I think that is your point, at least I hope it is.  The rhymes are forced, and it really doesn't go anywhere.  

So well done on writing a pointless poem.  

Answer 2

I like it but it seems like it missing feeling. Try to paint a picture in people's minds with your poems. SO people can see what is happening or how you feel.