Tell me if my rhymes are laid out or played out?

Question

alright so i got the hook and one verse and if yall like it i'll finish it and if not i'll start over so let me know

You could learn something if you shut your mouth

Going around ignorant like a slave owner in the south

Living in lies and never expanding your perception

Everything you think you know is a misconception

I stop and I talk and listen to elders

Who go around with chips on there shoulders

And walk around with guns in their holsters

The ones who kept crack in their toasters

And I try to learn from all their mistakes

But I still make my own and that’s all it takes

Sometimes I feel like a fish out of water

That’s being forced into the slaughter

Sometimes I don’t know why I even bother

Can you please save my soul oh Holy Father

I’ll turn something minor into something major

Like turning five bucks into a fifty grand wager

When the cops are around I’m being belligerent

That will be the only time you see me acting ignorant

They walk around jaded and act like they ain’t hated

Well just like lil wayne those punks is over rated

You know they wont rest till theres no freedom left

Were getting charged with theft and sentenced to death

Answer 1

They're decent. You're not the first person to write a cops are pigs verse.

Do black people ever think "Hey maybe if we didn't call them pigs all the time and tried to work with them to make our community better they wouldn't misunderstand and mistreat us so often?" I'm just wondering.

Answer 2

Its not all dat bad it ok overall its pretty good

Answer 3

True Ballin.Yo man u need to stop talkin like that mayne im just sayin people could think ur racist mmayne u no wut im sayin.Cops is hatin cuz they trunks aint vibratin!Like the song:u can hear me fore u see me i got king kong in my trunk!

Yo ryhmes are sick mayne!