Tell me if you like sad peom I made up.

Question

My own bloods all around me as I try hard not to cry. I hear the police man say, this girls gonna die. If only I could hear your voice to say its allright. If only I could say I love you before I die tonight T.T

by Jess age 11

Answer 1

Wow strong words I like it I can imagine it while I'm reading you are a great poet if you were to change anything make it longer

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Answer 2

Jessica, this is a good effort - but, could you try not to go down the emo path?....it leads no-where in poetry.  This site is full of poems where young people write of death, agony and lost dreams....try to be different, write about your real life....you'll surprise yourself.

Emo poetry is fine if written as a release for teenage angst, but it will not make the writer grow as a poet - it is a dead end...pun intended

Answer 3

very touching an its so deep u can imagin it happing as you read it.  

Answer 4

I like it.

Whats wrong with the emo path..?

I think writing poetry should be done just to get your emotions out.

At least that's why I write.