Tell me if you like this poem/song: Just Let Me Be. And tell me if it should be made into a song or kept poem?

Question

i needed you endlessly

you just threw up the door to me

I'm losing my sanity

Your losing the vanity

once so appealing

what have you done to me

Sometimes I think I'm nothing without you

though you act if it's true

feeding into my blues

orchestrating the moods

responding with your own slew

of fuckery

inducting me

And I wish

we could just be

live like simple human beings

life's not what is seems

Oh I wish

you would just love me

the way you used to love me

Now you think that your above

and I know this isn't love

just let me be

Please coun't me out

of these silly little dances

where we come out armed with lances

and we fight like silly *******

washing clean with nothing to advance us

And love don't mean a thing

if it's just the hate you bring

I saw you gliding on a swing

and pushed you

overthrowing king

Answer 1

in paragraph 3 your last sentence does not have to rhyme, the last 2 paragraphs dont require rhyming + you should keep ths a poem becuase inorder for it to be a good song it needs a repeating point called the chorus

Answer 2

In the first stanza, 4th line I think Your should be you're. You're meaning you are and your meaning it belongs to you. Same thing with 4th stanza, 4th line. And I think that in the 5th stanza it should be count instead of coun't. Other than that I think it's fine. It tells a story and is true. It's a very beautiful poem. I think that it's just perfect as a poem.