Tell me wat u think of this poem that i wrote???

Question

reality in now hittin me hard

like a punch to the nose

but this is wat we chosed

i dont think we should be together anymore

i have cryied so much my lungs are now sore

i have tried to be the best i can

i have tried to be the best man

i used to thank god for sendin you to me

now i ask him..why did he send you to me

for a long time i thought we were ment to be

how can this be

i gave you all my love

and yet you have told me that my love is not enough

i am trying so hard to be though

but s**t i am so confuse

sometimes i want us to put on our old shoes

and go back to the happy couple we used to be

but thinkin about it..i dont want to go back to you

i will find someone new

someone not like you

but all the blame is on you..

i kept you for so long cuz i loved you

but now u just keep trowing me down

its a good thing that this happend now

i gave so many chances to change

but ur not gonna change

thinking it good you dont deserve a man like me

you have lost a good thing

Answer 1

It sounds like you lost someone or they lost you. But the rhyming is good and it sounds good all together.

Answer 2

d**n that  poem was nice!i ddiidnt noe yu new how to write poems lol!but i liked it!

Answer 3

i would give it 3 stars

Answer 4

awww...good job ^____^

be happy <( ^_^ )>

Answer 5

You feel a little resentment tarwards your ex...the poem is awesome.Hey you should write more because I love reading poems :D

Answer 6

overall it has a really good meaning, but you might want to work on your word choice. There are other things that rhyme with "you" besides just repeating the word "you"!

Also its kind of repetitive.

Answer 7

first off it would be a lot better if you used correct grammer and used spell check. i dont even understand the first line. i know what you're trying to say and its good but you definatly need to work on your word choice and grammer.

Answer 8

You are still on the surface of the issue, and you go back and forth between poles too often to convey any real emotional oomph to either side of how you're feeling.  If you do it over with a third of the words it would be better.  I applaud you for your honesty though.

Answer 9

Love it good job man

Answer 10

that is really sad are you going to break up with someone??? well its really sad but really good!!!!