Tell me what u think of this poem?

Question

Let us clear our minds

forget the world and discourse

on u for a moment

through my eyes u are viewed as hierarchy

an aura of enigma surrounds u

till my dying days u will be special 2 me

how much nobody but me really know's

through eye contact our affection shows

when i hold u nothing else matters

everything i ever wanted wrapped in flesh

somebody wake me

i think im dreaming because reality couldn't be this good!

i had trouble with a title...any suggestions??

Answer 1

Awsome

Answer 2

it sound to plain u should change it up a bit

Answer 3

I think you should spell all the words out, otherwise it really discourages people reading it, and those are usually the best audience being discouraged for something so little.

Answer 4

I think it's a lovely poem full of emotion that people can relate to. Great job! I personally adore it. I'm not that great at titles, either, but I have noticed that poem titles are generally very short, and to the point. Perhaps "You" would be sufficient? Or maybe "Dream Love"? Whatever you choose, the poem is fantastic. Great work! You should be proud. However, if you're planning to give it to someone - or submit it to a publisher or something, you should probably fix the English errors, such as capitalizing the first letter of each line. Good luck!