Tell me what you think about my rhymes?

Question

alright so i got the hook and one verse and if yall like it i'll finish it and if not i'll start over so let me know

You could learn something if you shut your mouth

Going around ignorant like a slave owner in the south

Living in lies and never expanding your perception

Everything you think you know is a misconception

I stop and I talk and listen to elders

Who go around with chips on there shoulders

And walk around with guns in their holsters

The ones who kept crack in their toasters

And I try to learn from all their mistakes

But I still make my own and that’s all it takes

Sometimes I feel like a fish out of water

That’s being forced into the slaughter

Sometimes I don’t know why I even bother

Can you please save my soul oh Holy Father

I’ll turn something minor into something major

Like turning five bucks into a fifty grand wager

When the cops are around I’m being belligerent

That will be the only time you see me acting ignorant

They walk around jaded and act like they ain’t hated

Well just like lil wayne those punks is over rated

You know they wont rest till theres no freedom left

Were getting charged with theft and sentenced to death

Answer 1

DATS HOT IM FEELING YA RYHMES..IMMA RAPPER MYSELF..CHECK ME OUT AT MYSPACE.COM/NEWYORKGANGSTERS...IM REALLY DIGGIN IT

Answer 2

Its overall ait. some parts are great, some parts are meh, and regardless of how much lil wayne sucks you should have enough respect for a fellow mc not to diss him on wax being unprovoked.

Answer 3

i like  it.

Answer 4

WOW...THAT WAS FANTASTIC. LOVED THE LYRICS. I CAN SEE YOU SOMEDAY IN THE MUSIC INDUSTRY AS A GREAT SONG WRITER. GOOD LUCK

Answer 5

Good

I liked it

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