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Question

She is not Gone

They had the perfect life.

They had a clean house, with very little strife.

She got so far, she went straight down.

They didn't do enough.

He cried all day, he cried all night.

His life is forever ruined, it will never be the same.

How can this be, love's supposed to last forever more, but his is lost in the wondering sea?

All people come, all people go, but not her, no.

She is not gone, this cannot be.

Answer 1

How can this be,

love's supposed to last forever

but his is forever lost wondering in the sea?

i would write it like this

very well done^.^

Answer 2

Very very good just one little thing in the end it makes you fell sad try and make people who read it fell good about themselves